The Last One?

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Last One
Copyright -Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The building was empty, abandoned.

“This must be the last one in the city we haven’t done.” She unbuttoned his coat.

“You’re joking!” He knew she wasn’t.

“You always say that, but you enjoy yourself despite all. Remember the apartment building downtown?” She pulled him into the elevator by his coat lapel.

“Very slow. Lots of bumps.” He smiled at the memory.

“And city hall?”

“Distracting music, but we got to the top.” He remembered it well.

“Twice.” She giggled.

“All that walnut veneer inspired me.”

“Going up?” Her breath was warm on his neck. She smelled of coconut.


44 thoughts on “The Last One?”

  1. Ha!ha!This was such a different ride-guess both enjoyed it to much-sad that it was the last such building-does it mean no more fun? 😉

    1. I suspect they will utilize stairwells, closets, and empty boardrooms next. The possibilities are endless 🙂 Thanks for for your comment. Glad you liked it.

  2. Now that is a different and clever take on the photo, Sorchia. Really raised the standard. You write drafts of post-it notes? Do you mind if I use that in a story?

    1. Hahaha. Writers are always editing 🙂 I write rough drafts of post-it note memos before I actually commit them to the post-it note–I bet you do, too.

  3. I’m wondering how early or how late they’re able to do anything without other people around. I’m looking at this in too much of a practical way I guess, but wouldn’t they need to have a key to get in those buildings at those times? They must have importance influence. Well written.

    1. I got the idea they enjoyed the challenge of a crowd nearby–though some practical precautions would have to be taken or they’re going to wind up in jail. Let’s say she’s the mayor and this is part of her “Getting to know your Community” program.
      Thanks very much for your comment.

  4. What sort of tea do you drink?? 🙂 Many puns come to mind, but I’m resolutely not going there, but they obviously are. Looking at the question mark at the end of the title, I wonder whether there are more elevators.


    1. Thanks, Janet. I drink a nice green tea with jasmine–I suspect the jasmine did it 🙂 My thought is that even if they’ve done all the elevators, they will move on to closets, washrooms, and staircases.

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