Ninety-nine words!
“Why’d you come back?” He leaned against the doorframe—shirtless, tanned, beautiful.
“Missed your cooking.” My dress hugged shaking legs in the spring breeze. I sounded braver than I felt.
“Aren’t you sick of this—what did you call it?—backwoods boil on the Universe’s ass.” He spat the words.
Gentle chimes broke his mood. A rising wind swayed the black iron bell on the porch.
“It only rings for weddings and funerals.” His cat-green eyes slipped over me like warm water. ”Family legend.”
“Which one now?” I held my breath.
He stepped aside. “Come in and we’ll see.”
Very sexy story!
Thanks, Riya. Glad you enjoyed it.
Dear Sorchia,
He sounds hard to resist. Hoping the bell is ringing for a wedding. Nice one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks, Rochelle.
Ooh,love that open end..wonder now… 😉 Love this!
Thanks. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
🙂
Good descrptive words that paint a definite word picture. It looks like romance is in that wind that’s blowing.
Thanks, Patricia. It could be romance or more arguing over where to live–I’m not sure. I’m happy you liked it.
Sounds like he has a choice to make. Great writing.
Yep–not sure how it will go 🙂 Thanks for reading and commenting.
oooh he sounds like someone who just stepped out of a romance novel, intriguing. 🙂
Thanks, K.Z. I’m glad you liked it.
You built such tension and emotion into your ninety-nine words! Very nicely done, and an enjoyable story to boot.
Thank you, Joanna. Glad you liked it.
I liked this story very much – it pulled me in straight away. Even in just 99 words you’ve given them potential I reckon. She came back after all. And he invited her in. What more can a good story want! 🙂
Thanks, Nina. They have problems, but I’m hoping it works out. I’m glad you liked it.
Ooohh, I love this story! He sounds too gorgeous to resist. Can he forgive “backwoods boil on the Universe’s ass?” It’s written so succinctly and effectively.
Thanks, Karen. I have a picture of him in my mind–100 words isn’t enough 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.
Sounds romantic, but I still don’t know if it’s going to work. Well-written. On a completely different note, so to speak, what Scotch do you like? I like the smoky Scotchs, such as Lagavulin.
janet
Thanks, Janet. I’m not sure about them either. They seem to have more problems than 100 words allows. As for Scotch, Laphroaig is my favorite. The peatier, the better. I’ve never tried Lagavulin–it’s on my bucket list.
Thanks, Janet. They seem to have more problems than can be dealt with in 100 words. As for Scotch, Laphroaig is my favorite. I’ve never tried Lagavulin but it’s on my bucket list :). Glad you enjoyed my story.